Shopaholic/Correction Bonjour! Je souhaiterais obtenir de l'aide de quelqu'un afin de corriger mon texte! Je remercie d'avance ceux ou celles qui m'aideront! Th
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Shopaholic/Correction
Bonjour!
Je souhaiterais obtenir de l'aide de quelqu'un afin de corriger mon texte!
Je remercie d'avance ceux ou celles qui m'aideront!
The document is a confessions of a Shopaholic.
At the begining of the text,the narrator shops around when she suddenly see a rows of scarves.Among them she a really graceful scarf,that it's made of silky Velvet overprinted in a paler blue.At the start she resists temptation but a shop assistant urges her to buy it,since the scarf is half priced.As a result the narrator cannot told nothing but "I have to have it!I have to wear it!.We can notice that she gets mad,since she thinks this product will make her a different person,a more graceful and beautiful woman.Alla thanks to a scar. In the end ,she yields to temptation and buy the scarf.
During the reading of this text I was shocked that there are persons who thinks that a single trinkets will change their life.It is surely a consequence of consummer's society,who is going to destroy the individualism of the people.
Sur ce je vous souhaite une bonne fin de soirée!
Bonjour!
Je souhaiterais obtenir de l'aide de quelqu'un afin de corriger mon texte!
Je remercie d'avance ceux ou celles qui m'aideront!
The document is a confessions of a Shopaholic.
At the begining of the text,the narrator shops around when she suddenly see a rows of scarves.Among them she a really graceful scarf,that it's made of silky Velvet overprinted in a paler blue.At the start she resists temptation but a shop assistant urges her to buy it,since the scarf is half priced.As a result the narrator cannot told nothing but "I have to have it!I have to wear it!.We can notice that she gets mad,since she thinks this product will make her a different person,a more graceful and beautiful woman.Alla thanks to a scar. In the end ,she yields to temptation and buy the scarf.
During the reading of this text I was shocked that there are persons who thinks that a single trinkets will change their life.It is surely a consequence of consummer's society,who is going to destroy the individualism of the people.
Sur ce je vous souhaite une bonne fin de soirée!
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1. Réponse MissPrincessPanda
il y a juste une faute (enfin je crois) à "and buy the scarf" moi, je comprends : elle acheter l'écharpe"
PS: je ne suis pas très sûr de moi !