Bonjour, j'ai écrit un texte en anglais et je voudrais savoir si il y a des fautes, je remarque egalement que certaines phrases sont mal tournés, pouvez-vous m'

Bonjour, j'ai écrit un texte en anglais et je voudrais savoir si il y a des fautes, je remarque egalement que certaines phrases sont mal tournés, pouvez-vous m'aider? Pouvez-vous le corriger?
"Today, people, all generations, give too much importance to physical appearance. When a woman or a man are not the same physical appearance that other people, they are not good accept in society. But the behaviour, the personality are not important. For example, when we go for to have a job, our physical appearance is very important. To have good clothes is the one of things important. Actually, in society, the first jugement, when we weet people, is the must important. A person can have looks different of we, but she can has the same personality and she can a great people even if she looks strange! When we meet new people, we don't just look her this appearance but to speak, to discover the personality of this person. In the society, we can see diffezrent groups with different physical appearance. For example, people with baggy pants and dreadlocks and people who wear black clothes everytime "gothick". Thus, a person can have a good phydical appearance bu have a bad personality."
Merci d'avance