Oral/Espaces et échanges Bonjour à tous, j'ai écrit mon oral d'anglais mais j'aimerais que quelqu'un me corrige mes fautes (n'étant pas très forte en anglais il
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Bonjour à tous,
j'ai écrit mon oral d'anglais mais j'aimerais que quelqu'un me corrige mes fautes (n'étant pas très forte en anglais il doit y en avoir beaucoup --')
Merci d'avance !!
Globalization can create progress and economic development for thirds world countries economy with the establishment of FMN.Indeed, it creates jobs , . let us take the example of an extract of « cosmopolitan girl » priti, a young indian girl find a job in an australian company. therefore, she is proud because she can be more integrate in the indian society because of the wage and this new independence as a indian women..
Globalization can create a new culture or a mix between several culture with the movement of people in the world; in one society it creates diversity of people ,and there are not a stereotype of people in each nation. so it’s a melting pot; this dual culture is an asset, like spanglish , this dialect was studied by ilan stavans , a professor of latin american college , which is a dialect with a mix between english and spanish. we can prove that globalization is a bane . because with the spanglish, they cut theirselves off from the mother tongue. and they don’t succeed at school because they don’t assimilate the english grammar.as a result, they don’t be integrated very well in a society.
Globalization spread the American way of life and the standard of living of people are standardized , By a journalist mark rice Oxley in the christian science monitor show that hollywood rules the global movie market, with up to 90 percent of audiences in some european countries for example in Africa two of three films shown are american. besides, indian sports enthusiasts increasingly watch basketball, not cricket whereas it’s a traditional sport in india.
i’s a same thing with the american multinationals companies, they have spread throughout the world and it brings the american way of life. for example, we saw a photography took in india with a macdonald, this company has become a symbol of globalization, because she has spread throughout the world. sometimes referred to as the « macdomination »
it results a contrast between western culture who have values and standard of living different of traditional culture. the traditional culture are despised for the benefit of the domination of western culture. This situation has contributed to a distancing between adults who want to preserve traditional culture and way of life and young people who are influenced by this new culture; for example , in a texte « why america » mali ’s father, doesn’t want that her son go to america to study story-telling because he doesn't like this way of life, too much libertine for him.
unfortunately, third world countries have to conform to the western model. for example, the mother of priti was shocked by priti’s job. she doesn't like that her daughter has to changed her name to hayley and quit her accent to speak as an australian women.
In a photography a man denounces capitalism's system and more generally multinational companies which have the monopoly worldwide. he replaced stars in the american flag by logo of the multinational companies because it’s brand companies who have the power. and not the population.
we watched a documentary inconvenient truth, it shows the environmental issue of globalization with the increasing of storms deforestation, poverty and global warming due to a pollution
because with a globalization we exchange a lot with petroleum gaz to stay competitive.
this documentary shows the importance of protecting the world.
As a conclusion, with the globalization the world became one space. we can discover, travel and work in the entire world with the technological advances.
but i think we lost a collective awareness because we don’t feel belong to a specific nation and i think we became very individualist to stay competitive and we forget to take care about our planet. indeed we start only now to worry about the global warming. and looking for solutions . infortunately, the Usa don’t sign kyoto protocol to stay competitive in the globalization.
Bonjour à tous,
j'ai écrit mon oral d'anglais mais j'aimerais que quelqu'un me corrige mes fautes (n'étant pas très forte en anglais il doit y en avoir beaucoup --')
Merci d'avance !!
Globalization can create progress and economic development for thirds world countries economy with the establishment of FMN.Indeed, it creates jobs , . let us take the example of an extract of « cosmopolitan girl » priti, a young indian girl find a job in an australian company. therefore, she is proud because she can be more integrate in the indian society because of the wage and this new independence as a indian women..
Globalization can create a new culture or a mix between several culture with the movement of people in the world; in one society it creates diversity of people ,and there are not a stereotype of people in each nation. so it’s a melting pot; this dual culture is an asset, like spanglish , this dialect was studied by ilan stavans , a professor of latin american college , which is a dialect with a mix between english and spanish. we can prove that globalization is a bane . because with the spanglish, they cut theirselves off from the mother tongue. and they don’t succeed at school because they don’t assimilate the english grammar.as a result, they don’t be integrated very well in a society.
Globalization spread the American way of life and the standard of living of people are standardized , By a journalist mark rice Oxley in the christian science monitor show that hollywood rules the global movie market, with up to 90 percent of audiences in some european countries for example in Africa two of three films shown are american. besides, indian sports enthusiasts increasingly watch basketball, not cricket whereas it’s a traditional sport in india.
i’s a same thing with the american multinationals companies, they have spread throughout the world and it brings the american way of life. for example, we saw a photography took in india with a macdonald, this company has become a symbol of globalization, because she has spread throughout the world. sometimes referred to as the « macdomination »
it results a contrast between western culture who have values and standard of living different of traditional culture. the traditional culture are despised for the benefit of the domination of western culture. This situation has contributed to a distancing between adults who want to preserve traditional culture and way of life and young people who are influenced by this new culture; for example , in a texte « why america » mali ’s father, doesn’t want that her son go to america to study story-telling because he doesn't like this way of life, too much libertine for him.
unfortunately, third world countries have to conform to the western model. for example, the mother of priti was shocked by priti’s job. she doesn't like that her daughter has to changed her name to hayley and quit her accent to speak as an australian women.
In a photography a man denounces capitalism's system and more generally multinational companies which have the monopoly worldwide. he replaced stars in the american flag by logo of the multinational companies because it’s brand companies who have the power. and not the population.
we watched a documentary inconvenient truth, it shows the environmental issue of globalization with the increasing of storms deforestation, poverty and global warming due to a pollution
because with a globalization we exchange a lot with petroleum gaz to stay competitive.
this documentary shows the importance of protecting the world.
As a conclusion, with the globalization the world became one space. we can discover, travel and work in the entire world with the technological advances.
but i think we lost a collective awareness because we don’t feel belong to a specific nation and i think we became very individualist to stay competitive and we forget to take care about our planet. indeed we start only now to worry about the global warming. and looking for solutions . infortunately, the Usa don’t sign kyoto protocol to stay competitive in the globalization.
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Globalization can create progress and economic development for especially for third world country's economy with the establishment of FMN ( you cannot use abbreviation before introducing the word and its abbreviation earlier on). Indeed, it creates jobs , . let us take the example of an extract of « cosmopolitan girl »(use quotation marks) Priti, a young indian girl finds a job in an Australian company. Therefore, she is proud because she can be more integrated in the Indian society because of the wage and this new independence as a Indian women..
Globalization can create a new culture or a mix between several cultures with the movement of people around the world;(you can end this sentence here to avoid having long sentences). In one society it creates diversity of people ,and there are not a stereotype of people in each nation. so it’s a melting pot; this dual culture is an asset, like Spanglish , this dialect was studied by Ilan Stavans , a professor of Latin American college , which is a dialect with a mix between English and Spanish. We can prove that globalization is a bane( you cannot refer to bane in this manner...he is not an 'adjective or adverb') . because with the Spanglish, they cut themselves off from the mother tongue. and they don’t succeed at school because they don’t assimilate the English grammar.as a result, they are not well integrated in the society.
Globalization spread the American way of life and the standard of living of people are standardized (redundancy). A report by a journalist, Mark Rice Oxley, in the christian science monitor show, says that Hollywood rules the global movie market, with up to 90 percent of audiences arise from some European countries and to include the fact that in Africa two of three films shown are American. Besides, Indian sports enthusiasts increasingly watch basketball and not cricket whereas it’s a traditional sport in India.
It’s the same thing with the american multinationals companies, they have spread throughout the world bringing with them the American way of life. For example(instance), we looked at a photograph (in class) taken in India at MacDonald's, proving that this company has become a symbol of globalization, because she has spread throughout the entire world and sometimes referred to as the « macdomination »(use quotation marks instead) .
The result is a contrast (antagonism) between western culture which has values and standards of living that differ from the traditional cultures. The traditional cultures are despised for the benefit(due to) the domination of western culture. This situation has contributed to a distancing(frictions) between adults who want to preserve traditional culture and way of life and young people who are influenced by this new culture.For example, in the text "why America," Mali ’s father, doesn’t want his son go to America to study story-telling because he doesn't like this way of life, too many libertine for him.
Unfortunately, third world countries have to conform to the western model (add a reason). for example,(your text is full of "for example" you use some other phrase) Priti's mother was shocked by Priti’s job as she doesn't like that her daughter has to changed her name to Haley and quit her accent to speak as an Australian woman.
Using a photograph a man denounces capitalism's system and more generally multinational companies that have monopolistic powers worldwide. He replaced stars in the american flag with logos of the multinational companies because it’s the brand companies that have the power and not the population.
We also looked at a documentary "inconvenient truth," it shows the environmental issue of globalization with the increasing of storms,deforestation, poverty and global warming due to pollution
because with globalization we exchange(produce) a lot with petroleum gas to stay competitive.
this documentary shows the importance of protecting the world.
As a conclusion, with globalization the world became one space; we can discover, travel and work in the entire world with the technological advances.
But I think we lost a collective awareness because as don’t feel like we belong to a specific nation and I think we became very individualist to stay competitive and we forgot to take care of our planet. It is only now that we have started worrying about the global warming and looking for solutions. Unfortunately, the USA hasn't signed the kyoto protocol so as to stay competitive in the globalization.
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